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It was the last straw. Jack was getting beat by Regulus, the biggest bully in the school. He tried to punch Jack again but he was ready. Jack dogged and stepped behind Regulus and he tripped and face planted on the asphalt. Jack normally would say "that teaches you to mess with me" but he had a bloody nose and it would come out like "bat beaches ou o ess wit we". He went home, washed up and called his friends, Tom and Alex and told them what happened. He invited them to spend the night since their parents were out bowling. They lay down on Jack's trampoline and talked about middle school, troubles, other friends, stuff like that. Jack grabbed his telescope and they took turns looking through it. Jack saw something that he didn’t see before. He magnified it and saw a planet made of water. He told Tom and Alex to look at it. Tom said “wow just wow”. Jack said, “What are we going to do, inhabit it?” Alex said, “ hey, we should make a non-descriminating society."


 * Describe the start of your story. || * Introduce your characters: Jack,Tom,Alex


 * What do they want?: To build a Utopia where everyone is accepted


 * Where are they going?: to planet 519 or Poseidon ||
 * What happens in the middle of your story? || * How will all your story and characters develop?: they are accepted by some but not by all


 * Plot Twists and Turns?: they discover planet 519 or Poseidon while looking through a telescope one night and think they could make a society where everyone who doesn't exclude others is welcome


 * How will you lead up to the climax?: they spend months designing and building //The Neptune// and build others such as //The Poseidon's revenge// and others like that. Years later a stranger tries to persuade the three to let him become a dictator but they refuse. Then, on the 15th anniversary of the day Poseidon was inhabited the stranger attacks. He destroys the planet but not before everyone escapes ||
 * Outline the climax...How does the story end? || * Is your ending what your readers are expecting?


 * Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story? ||

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mini-saga Frank was shoved into a locker by the worst bully in the school,again. The kid's name is Jared. He tried to punch Frank in the face, but he is fast. Jared hit the locker so hard he dented it. "@#$!*&#!" came out with the loud CRACK of his hand.

Planet 519 or //Poseidon//

It was the last straw. Jack was getting beat by Regulus, the biggest bully in the school. He tried to punch Jack again but he was ready. Jack dogged and stepped behind Regulus and Regulus tripped and face planted on the asphalt. Jack normally would say "that teaches you to mess with me" but he had a bloody nose and it would come out like "bat beaches ou o ess wit we". He went home, washed up and called his friends, Tom and Alex and told them what happened. He invited them to spend the night since their parents were out bowling. They lay down on Jack's trampoline and talked about middle school, troubles, other friends, stuff like that. Jack grabbed his telescope and they took turns looking through it. Jack saw something that he didn’t see before. He magnified it and saw a planet made of water. He told Tom and Alex to look at it. Tom said “wow just wow”. Jack said, “What are we going to do, inhabit it?” Alex said, “Hey, we should make a non-discriminating society.” That sparked a revolution in their minds. They spent days planning for the day when they inhabited it. They made laws for people so there would be no fights. Days turned to weeks, weeks turned to months, months turned to years. They informed NASA, who was surprised to find the boys (now 20) were right. By late August, several habitats were ready to be launched to planet 519 or Poseidon as the trio called it. They would be the first to be on Poseidon (other than the fish). There was scuba gear and food and plants (for air) and other necessitys. Soon they were ready for launch. They got onto the habitat called THE NEPTUNE. The trio heard 3...2...1...LIFTOFF! They each felt like invisible elephants were piled on them. Then they were floating in the habitat. It didn't last long. Before they knew it the radio said, "prepare for splashdown". They heard a WHOOSH and felt a jolt and the radio said, "welcome to planet 519". On a huge tv in a park they saw a map of the planet and saw where the other habitats splashed down. Alex said,"amazing, its all water but it is being held together by just the atmosphere". They knew that arrivals would be coming tomorrow so they got to work. Jack wold take the first "water walk" on this planet to prep the interlocks that would allow newcomers to get on board. The other habitats had robots. Mean while, Alex and Tom would prep the polygraph to tell if newcomers would be nice or not. If not they would be sent back. If they were nice then mean they would be sent back by themselves. Soon it was time for bed. They crashed at their house. The next day, the newcomers arrived. House and apartments were filled. For 10 years they prospered, but then the 10 years ended. Jack's old enemy, Regulus managed to sneak in after years of being sent back. He managed to get followers that believed that Jack, Tom, and Alex should no longer be in charge. On the 10th anniversary, he attacked. He attacked THE NEPTUNE while his followers attacked the other habitats. They had bombs and guns. Alex said on the emergency broadcast line, " EVERYONE TO THE ESCAPE PODS, I REPEAT, EVERYONE TO THE ESCAPE PODS!" The three were the last ones to get onto a pod. They escaped they planet and returned to Earth with the others before it blew up and sank into a black hole, lost forever.

The End.......For now

Epilogue Regulus escaped, hiding from authorities, to Mars. He is hiding, bidding his time waiting for the perfect time for revenge...