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The Adventures of Jimmy and Billy
By
Ryan Verzuh


Sugar Candy mountain from outside
Sugar Candy mountain from outside



Sugar Candy mountain on the inside
Sugar Candy mountain on the inside


A little boy named Jimmy lived in the rich city. His once big city was divided into a rich city and a poor city. One day Jimmy was so curious about what was on the other side of the wall that divided the two cities. So, he sneaked out of the house. Slowly Jimmy approached the wall that divided the two cities. He was curious. He had to know what was beyond there. He located a small opening in the wall and climbed through. Just as he got through, he met a scrawny boy called Billy. "Don't come in here." Billy said. He came in anyway. He asked Billy to take him around the poor city and give him a look. Billy agreed, but warned Jimmy that he might not come back alive. Jimmy did not care. Billy took Jimmy around the city and it was an amazing tour since Billy knew the in and outs of the streets and alleys. By the end of the tour, Billy and Jimmy were friends. The next day, when he was going to go back and see Billy, he noticed that the hole had been patched up in the wall.Jimmy went back home and called Billy. They both agreed that they should go to sugar candy mountain. Sugar candy mountain was where the government was at. They were planning on asking if the cities could go back to being one big city. On the way to sugar candy mountain, they had to go through a dark forest. The only reason that they were able to make it through the forest was because Billy had street smarts. When they got through, they continued on until they were at the top of sugar candy mountain. Sugar candy mountain was a misleading name. The mountain was actually very dark and stormy. When they approached the ice cream palace that held the meetings, they almost got too scared and backed out, but they did not. They opened the door and realized the meeting was about to start. They joined the meeting and waited their turn to talk. When it was their turn to talk, they spoke about how the two cities really should become one so that they should all be able to interact together. The government listened respectfully and it looked as though the government were leaning towards the two boys and were thinking that it was a bad idea to divide the city. After the boys were done, the government told them that they were not sure and would need the boys to talk again the next day and they gave them a hotel room to stay the night. The boys stayed up late reviewing what they would say the next day. The next day, the boys woke up later than they wanted because they stayed up late. But, they still made it to the meeting on time. They told their speech and it was looking like the government had made up their mind at were going to tear down the wall. But just then, a flying man flew in and fought against making it one big city. He reminded them why they had made it two cities. "All people are equal, but some are more equal than others" he explained. Apparently, that was enough to change their mind. At that moment boys realized that their always has been and their always will be a rich class and a poor class and that two boys weren't going to change that.

The End

MIDDLE _ BEGINNING _ END Work Sheet

Describe the start of your story.
  • Introduce your characters: Jimmy, Billy, and the government

  • What do they want? They want to not be separated by class because Jimmy's family is rich and Billy's family is very poor.
  • Where are they going? To sugar candy where the government meets and they are going to talk to the government at the ice cream palace.
What happens in the middle of your story?
  • How will all your story and characters develop? They will be described towards the beginning of the story.

  • Plot Twists and Turns? The boys think that it is an easy path to sugar candy mountain, but actually they must go through a dark forest. They think that sugar candy mountain is very

  • How will you lead up to the climax? I will use a little foreshadowing and steps to get to the climax.
Outline the climax...How does the story end?
  • Is your ending what your readers are expecting? I don't think so, depends on what the reader is thinking will happen.

  • Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story? I might, it is undecided
Slowly Jimmy approached the wall that divided the two cities. He was curious. He had to know what was beyond there. He located a small opening in the wall and climbed through. Just as he got through, he met a scrawny boy called Billy. "Don't come in here." Billy said.

Rough Draft:
A little boy named Jimmy lived in the rich city. His city was divided into a rich city and a poor city. One day Jimmy was so curious about what was on the other side of the wall that divided the two cities. So, he sneaked out of the house. Slowly Jimmy approached the wall that divided the two cities. He was curious. He had to know what was beyond there. He located a small opening in the wall and climbed through. Just as he got through, he met a scrawny boy called Billy. "Don't come in here." Billy said. Jimmy came in anyway. He asked Billy to take him around the poor city and give him a look. Billy agreed, but warned Jimmy that he might not come back alive. Jimmy did not care. Billy took Jimmy around the city and it was an amazing tour since Billy knew the in and outs of the streets and alleys. By the end of the tour, Billy and Jimmy were friends. The next day, when Jimmy was going to go back and see Billy, he noticed that the hole had been patched up in the wall. Jimmy went back home and called Billy. They both agreed that they should go to sugar candy mountain. Sugar candy mountain was where the government was at. They were planning on asking if the cities could go back to being one big city. On the way to sugar candy mountain, they had to go through a dark forest. The only reason that they were able to make it through the forest was because Billy had street smarts. When they got through, they continued on until they were at the top of sugar candy mountain. Sugar candy mountain was a misleading name. The mountain was actually very dark and stormy. When they approached the building that held the meetings, they almost got too scared and backed out, but they did not. They opened the door and realized the meeting was about to start. They joined the meeting and waited their turn to talk. When it was their turn to talk, they spoke about how the two cities really should become one so that they should all be able to interact together. The government listened respectfully and it looked as though the government were leaning towards the two boys and were thinking that it was a bad idea to divide the city. After the boys were done, the government told them that they were not sure and would need the boys to talk again the next day and they gave them a hotel room to stay the night. The boys stayed up late reviewing what they would say the next day. The next day, the boys woke up later than they wanted because they stayed up late. But, they still made it to the meeting on time. They told their speech and it was looking like the government had made up their mind at were going to tear down the wall. But just then, a flying man flew in and fought against making it one big city. He reminded them why they had made it two cities. "All people are equal, but some are more equal than others" he explained. Apparently, that was enough to change their mind. At that moment boys realized that their always has been and their always will be a rich class and a poor class and that two boys weren't going to change that.