My Tale of Utopia

Just let me go please, PLEASE! shouted anne. The last in the long line of murders Anne is found dead. who would do this?
This thriller makes all ages wonder, it compels many and will make the most suspenseful book you can think of. Given a 4
out of five stars by daniel enseleit and kati mitchiolatti.With a theme of violence and control we go into the mind of a killer with
all but knowing what we will find.
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MIDDLE _ BEGINNING _ END Work Sheet

MY MINI SAGA
I’m in the middle of a room screaming my lungs off but no one even turns their heads in recognition, I feel as though I am a million miles away even though I am right there. Why is no body looking at me why does nobody care? Where am I?
Describe the start of your story.
  • Introduce your characters:
My characters will be Kalia, James, Clary, Marcy, and Alec.
  • What do they want?
They all want to solve the murders in their home town knowing only a
little and with a basic profile of the killer they have little to go on.
  • Where are they going?
Trifiling through there home town seeing a side of it they never
thought to be possible.
What happens in the middle of your story?
  • How will all your story and characters develop?

The characters will develop through there own personal tragities
linked to the murderous spree.
  • Plot Twists and Turns?
The main plot will be the finding of the murderer and the twist
will be that one of the kids trying to find the murderer is acually the
murderer.
  • How will you lead up to the climax?
I plan on useing a big bloody battle sceen where the teens find out just
how phycotic there friend really is.
Outline the climax...How does the story end?
  • Is your ending what your readers are expecting?
The ending will be left open the killer will be revieled but then a twist
when all of the teens end up dead.
  • Have you used foreshadowing throughout your story?
I plan to let the readers know that one of the kids is the killer but not
to reveal which one.
My topic---- The Malevolent Murderer


The Malevolent murderer
I’m in the middle of a room screaming my lungs off but no one even turns their heads in recognition, I feel as though I am a million miles away even though I am right there.
Launching up with a gasp of air I feel my head grow light, a chain is binding my hands but I don’t understand why. Where did everyone go, I was just at that party last night. All I remember was scanning the crowd for my best friend and finding nothing but the big dogs Kalia and James standing hand in hand with their faithful sidekick Clary right behind them. Finally I spot her, my best friend Marcey standing in the corner with her boyfriend Alec. He is the worst boyfriend I can think of after kissing me on a double date he tells me, “You tell her and she will hate you just as much as me.”. Where did they all go? Then I realize it must have been a dream. A real dream that had just happed but then how did I get here? As if to answer my question a man in a black ski mask walked in to give me food and said “Here we need you to have all your strength if you want to live.” At that he left and I felt a shudder run through my back as I ate the food greedily I thought it had a peculiar taste but I was starved so I ate ravenously.
Later that day the same girl, Anne, was found dumped on the side of the road, dead. The same thing had happened to the star of the football team James’ best friend and the queen bee, Kalia’s sister. Now that Marcey had lost Anne she was starting to float towards Clary with all her problems and sorrows of Anne’s death. These teens brought together by the loss of a lifetime they dive into an investigation many would view as better to be left alone.
Over the next week this group was called to the counselor due to their connection to the murders. All of them were interviewed then evaluated to determine whether they will need further counseling due to the trauma they endured. In one particular group session the teens decided to meet after school to talk about the finding the killer of their loved ones. Many would say they were obsessed. It just so happens that James’ dad was the police officer in charge of the murder investigation. He was able to get the profile of the killer and brought it to the meeting. After explaining that the only description that they had was a Caucasian male, 210 pounds, light brown hair and average height. “This could be anyone”, says Alec. James responds, “It makes it 100 suspects as opposed to the 10,000 people in this town.” ”That doesn’t matter it still hardly helps us at all.” Said Clarey. ”I’m going to Anne’s house tonight I’ll see if I can find anything.” Said Marcey. “I’ll go with you” said Alec.
At anne’s, Marcey went straight up to Annes room. Looking around she couldn’t find anything peculiar then she thought where were her clothes? After the party the night of her disaperaence she was said to have come home before she went missing. Marcey thought this was odd Anne hated dressing up and the first thing she would have done was come home and change.After reporting this to Alec they started searching the room where they found nothing. ” That means she must have been taken between here and the party.”said Marcey. “Shes a smart girl though, she would never get into a car or go somewhere with someone she didn’t know.”replied Alec. “ Well that narrows it down our suspect list it had to be some one she knew and truseted. “ said Marcey. “I left the party early but I didn’t see anything I drove this way which means she had to be taken when I was still at the party.”said Alec. “Ya when did you leave?” “I left around midnight everyone was still at the party so who do you think this was?”inquired Alec. ”I don’t know, but we will find out who killed her.”said Marcey.
Dear jornal,
I don’t know what Marcey and everybody is so obsessed over this, I killed them to help us all. Don’t they see how much this has brought us together and that #%%^ was goin g to tear us apart. She deserved how she died. I will make it impossible for them to figure out that I was the one who was doing them such a favor until its time at least.
-A
“What do you mean you lost it?” shouted Clary. “I mean when I went to bed I put the files on my night stand and this morning I woke up and they were gone.” said James. “Did you see any thing Alec?”, “No I was dead in my sleeping bag,not literally of corse but no I was asleep all night.” “Great now all we have is a lousey asumption that it was some one who left the party before midnight.” Said Marcey, speaking for the first time she shocked all of them. “Maybe we should just give up.”said Alec. “We can’t and I won’t.”
Later that week they were all on edge Alec had gone missing but had not turned up dead yet. Almost all the other victoms had turned up within one week and theat door was coming to a close in two days. They all contemplated if maybe he wasn’t kidnapped just he had meirly run away.Not quite knowing what to think they all set off to his house to wish his parents the best and ask for a quick search throught his room. Little did they know Alec lived on his own no parents in sight. It was only now that they realize just how little they acually knew about him.Searching through his room they found a jornal. “How odd,” said marcey, “he never told me he kept a jornal.”A she read her eyes filled with horror.



Final draft

The Malevolent murderer
by Kathryn Heryla
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Epilogue….
I’m in the middle of a room screaming my lungs off but no one even turns their heads in recognition, I feel as though I am a million miles away even though I am right there.
Launching up with a gasp of air I feel my head grow light, a chain is binding my hands but I don’t understand why. Where did everyone go, I was just at that party last night. All I remember was scanning the crowd for my best friend, Marcey, and finding nothing but the big dogs Kalia and James standing hand in hand with their faithful sidekick Clary right behind them. Finally I spot her, my best friend Marcey standing in the corner with her boyfriend Alec. He is the worst boyfriend I can think of after kissing me on a double date he tells me, “Anne, you tell her and she will hate you just as much as she would me.”. Where did they all go? Then I realize it must have been a dream. A real dream that had just happed but then how did I get here? As if to answer my question a man in a black ski mask walked in, snapping me back to the present, to give me food and said “Here we need you to have all your strength if you want to live.” At that he left and I felt a shudder run through my back as I ate the food greedily I thought it had a peculiar taste but I was starved so I ate ravenously. There had to be something odd about that voice though.
Later that day the same girl, Anne, was found dumped on the side of the road, dead. The same thing had happened to the star of the football team, James’ best friend and the queen bee, Kalia’s sister. Now that Marcey had lost Anne she was starting to float towards Clary with all her problems and sorrows of Anne’s death. These teens brought together by the loss of a lifetime they dive into an investigation many would view as better to be left alone.
Over the next week this group was called to the counselor due to their connection to the murders. All of them were interviewed then evaluated to determine whether they will need further counseling due to the trauma they endured. In one particular group session the teens decided to meet after school to talk about the finding the killer of their loved ones. Many would say they were obsessed. It just so happens that James’ dad was the police officer in charge of the murder investigation. He was able to get the profile of the killer and brought it to the meeting. After explaining that the only description that they had was a Caucasian male, 210 pounds, light brown hair and average height. “This could be anyone”, says Alec. James responds, “It makes it 100 suspects as opposed to the 10,000 people in this town.” ”That doesn’t matter it still hardly helps us at all.” Said Clarey. ”I’m going to Anne’s house tonight I’ll see if I can find anything.” Said Marcey. “I’ll go with you” said Alec.
At Anne’s, Marcey went straight up to Anne’s roo
m. Looking around she couldn’t find anything peculiar, then she thought where were her clothes? After the party the night of her disappearance she was said to have come home before she went missing. Marcey thought this was odd Anne hated dressing up and the first thing she would have done was come up here and change. After reporting this to Alec they started searching the room where they found nothing. ” That means she must have been taken between here and the party. “said Marcey. “She’s a smart girl though, she would never get into a car or go somewhere with someone she didn’t know. “replied Alec. “ Well that narrows it down our suspect list it had to be someone she knew and trusted. “ said Marcey. “I left the party early but I didn’t see anything I drove this way which means she had to be taken when I was still at the party. “said Alec. “Ya, when did you leave?” “I left around midnight everyone was still at the party so who do you think this was?”inquired Alec. ”I don’t know, but we will find out who killed her. “said Marcey.
Dear journal,
I don’t know what Marcey and everybody is so obsessed over this, I killed them to help us all. Don’t they see how much this has brought us together and that #%%^ was going to tear us apart. She deserved how she died. I will make it impossible for them to figure out that I was the one who was doing them such a favor, until its time at least.
-Me
“What do you mean you lost it?” shouted Clary. “I mean when I went to bed I put the files on my night stand and this morning I woke up and they were gone.” said James. “Did you see anything Alec?”, “No I was dead in my sleeping bag, not literally of course but no I was asleep all night.” “Great now all we have is a lousy assumption that it was someone who left the party before midnight.” Said Marcey, speaking for the first time she shocked all of them. “Maybe we should just give up. “Said Alec. “We can’t and I won’t. “said Clarey.
Later that week they were all on edge Alec had gone missing but had not turned up dead yet. Almost all the other victims had turned up within one week and that door was coming to a close in two days. They all contemplated if maybe he wasn’t kidnapped just he had merely run away. Not quite knowing what to think they all set off to his house to wish his parents the best and ask for a quick search through his room. Little did they know Alec lived on his own no parents in sight. It was only now that they realize just how little they actually knew about him. Searching through his room they found a journal. “How odd,” said Marcey, “he never told me he kept a journal." A she read her eyes filled with horror.
THE END